Friday, 18 August 2017
Descriptive writing by Te-o
Hello bloggers this is my first
As the creepy storm become to become a disaster for the town.
The space for life is looking after yourself or someone that helped you.
The stormy cloud in the sky like ghost black.The fast ground stormed into the
Black blue sea into the stormy ground.As i was looking at the two animals i thought to myself are are the animals going to die on ice age land. The sky was black the summer sun was so gone it was just the black blue sky.When the ice age had a stormy night
They thought that an shelter might work for the stormy island.The people was so sad like it was the end of the world.But the what was the meaning of the storm? A
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Kia ora Te-O,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your first draft writing on your blog! I can see you are focusing on descriptive writing. You have used some great descriptive phrases - my favourite is 'the sky was black, the summer sun had gone...'
A tip for your Te-O is to read your writing aloud to yourself, you will often pick up simple mistakes that you can quickly fix.
I look forward to reading more of your writing shared on your blog! 😊